Poems

[Emo234]

Ok this is where u can post poems,rate them,nd give advice for them.anyone can post,but please keep them rule safe If u feel offended by a comment about ur poem,plz report it or otherwise just ignore the comment Have fun.I'll start

As I sit here wondering,this pain peirces my heart.As this pain grows my heart weakens.It's like I can't win for loseing.All these things swarm in my head and I can't seem to distract myself.All I think is when will this pain stop,when will this suffering end.Why do I fught when I don't want to.Why do I shut them out?Why do I hate them?Why do they treat me like this,just as I trust them they give me another reason to hate them.Why do I get shoved aside and beaten down,like an animal in captivity.My heart aches every day,longing for forgiving love,and acceptance.Can I please stand up without being kicked down over and over?Forced off the edge.But no one cares.Trying to hold on,but now one see's how broken we are inside.No-one trys.As I see my life crumble before my eyes.I cry in pain and dispare.I just don't get heard.I lye here in scilence,as I slowly fade away.


plz note:"I was going through a ruff time,so plz don't be too hard on me "

[LovelyUndeadVam]

wow. that was REALLY good, emo. reminds me of what i like to write about in my poems.

[Emo234]

Thnx alot,I was wondering what kind of feedback I would get,lol. Thnx again

Well if u want post them here I would love to read them!!!!!!!!

[LovelyUndeadVam]

ohh, i have one.

The tears of blood flow heavily,
and I can't breathe.
Get off my chest,
I'm not going to be who you want.
I'll wear my dark clothes,
just to get at you.
I'll put on black make-up,
just to see your sneer.
Do you think you own me?
FYI, I own my soul,
not you.
Get off my chest.
Breathe.
Breathe.
My life is my own,
I make it what I want,
and you can't be there to run it,
because I am my own person.
A rebel.
Don't like it?
Get a life.

[Emo234]

wow that is really good too.I like how u stick it to whoever that was written about

[LovelyUndeadVam]

it was written to all the preppy people at my school that give me dirty looks. it's all because they think that i "cut myself".

[Clank]

WOW you guys those were really good

@emo- I love how you sort of sum up life
@luv- I love how dark and slick it is
@both- Really, really gud

Here is mine

In fear i tremble, i shake and shake. In fear i feast on everything that i shake about. It beats like a siren in the devils fear. The fears are coming. The fears are roaming all around the streets. Coming to get me, upon blissed fears. The fears i shake about are all coming, they're coming, and i am running away.

[LovelyUndeadVam]

! that's amazing geordie!

[Clank]

IS IT!? I have wrote loads better

[Emo234]

yes it is really good.U explain actions nd feelings very well I like it

[Clank]

I dont know guys, i think it isnt very good *false hope*

[Emo234]

That's what I thought about mine so don't worry bout it

[Clank]

OK thanks but i will post a better one

[Emo234]

yup me too,but l8er.I need to write some new ones too,cuz I only writ 2

[LovelyUndeadVam]

if i could access all mine i would have about...twenty to thirty. yeah i had a really rough time in life and i wrote to make it better. not saying that everything is okay now, but it's getting better. i could probably write another one.