Poems

[Emo234]

ok here's number two.I don't like this one as much as I like the first.


As I sit here trapped in my head.
My thoughts race in my head.
I scream,but no-one hears.
I try,but no-one understands.
The pressure,the deppression.
The confusion overwelms my brain.
The anger.
The resistance.
The love.
The hate.
The sweet.
The sorry.
Life,life can come,and life can go.
The days,hours,minutes slowly dissolving my exstance.
Like clay shattered on the pavement.
The tourture of the thought.
Do I like it or do I hate it?
The tears that I hide behind my eyes.
The pain in my thought won't go away.
The pain won't lessen.
The pain just won't fade away.

[Isaiah]

why are they all so sad
but still they are really good

[Clank]

Its good but it lacks continuous rythym (PLEASE TAKE NO OFFENCE IN THAT)

[Emo234]

Cuz I was going throught a ruff time so I wrote about it nd this is the result


@geordieboy-That is exactly what I thought,I just posted cuz I wanted to see what ppl would think. Thnx

[Isaiah]

well its happy now!

[Emo234]

good

[LovelyUndeadVam]

i can't write happy poems. sorry. sad or depressing poems have more meaning.

Smile.
Laugh.
Keep the lie from being exposed.
Wake up.
Put on make-up.
Try not to cry.
Compose that careful mask.
Don't let the true identity show.
No one cares.
Keep that lie from being exposed.
Look into their eyes.
They can't see.
Blind.
Severed from life.
Personal hell overtakes.
Friends?
Lies.
The lie is being exposed.
No light.
No sound.
No love.
Nothing.
Black.
Get ready.
You're entering my world now.

[Clank]

Cool poem

[LovelyUndeadVam]

thank you.

[Emo234]

wow that's my life right there lol,really good luv

[LovelyUndeadVam]

thanks.

[Clank]

Ok so here is my next one, i think it is loads better than my first

I lie awake.
I tremble.
I shudder.
I make my point.
But it gets lost in the fray.
I tighten my threads and fasten my lace
I pace the walk of fame,
up the street and out into the open
The welcoming doors pull you in
the echoes of pain drag you in
a day of suffering, a day of pain
Thats what it is.
Thats what it is.
The walk of fame lights up my path.
Enter the door i do and pace up the steps.
I fall, i never stop, i keep falling, i drop.
The fall was long.
Thats what it is.
Its me, my life, day after day

[LovelyUndeadVam]

! wow that was really good too Geordie!

[Clank]

Not to be big headed but i thought that was good but my first one was rubbish

[LovelyUndeadVam]

naw it's not big headed. i know my poems are good because i've been writing the same stuff for years, but i'm just to modest to say that kind of stuff. even now i want to deny what i just said. and your first one WAS good! no worries.