Sorry it took long while to write my opinion.
I hope you understand what I wanna say..
Yes, it's hard for me coz the rhyme is the most important essence in the poems. To rhyme beautifully there're some omissions, replacements/shifts of the words and some literary-style expressions. Those make the poem far different from what we speak in the conversation.
But I could imagine that scenary by picking up the words and feel the rhyme, and thought it beautiful poem.


Originally posted by Lilliputt


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