A new book

[~GH Dog~]

Im 11 can I read it?

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Yeah you can read it, i meant players who are 8 or younger, it doesn't get extremely violent and there wont be any weapons used so go ahead........

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Here is the next part...........

CHAPTER 2

I loved to be me.. It was hard sometimes but I always knew I was special, I was gifted. It was like I had that something inside of me that urged me to go on, that special something that makes you, who you are.

From a child I was quite lonely, I always preferred to be alone, I always preferred to be by myself instead of working with others, I always loved to take part. And we get back to my home, it was in front of a beautiful children’s park, however it did seem noisy, some people would take pleasure in the noise but I preferred silence. Yet I was free, I was like a dog in a kennel, and could easily get out. In all of this in the magnificent midst of this conversation should we get back to the cure.

The cure takes out the cells in your body and replaces them with new ones. This procedure naturally causes your immune system to rise and your body to work naturally.

However there is one minor detail I missed out… a little something that will grant me power. The cure may stop cancer, but it will change you, it will make you.. A phantom.

In case you were wondering a phantom is an unreal being or sensation: something that can be seen or heard or whose presence can be felt, but that is not physically present. An illusion to be precise.

I stood up naturally when I heard a bang outside, but it wasn’t important. I breathed heavily. My plan would work I knew it would. I walked over to the fire and put my hands over, it would warm me up. I lifted my head up and looked at the picture in the wooden frame above the fire, she was my little girl, she was called Ebony.

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WHAT does everyone Think?

[LovelyUndeadVam]

ooooo getting quite into the plot now! i'm 'cited! i can't wait!

[~GH Dog~]

love it

geting so good

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Thanks e7ga123 and lovelyundeadvam, it is really good to hear feedback

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Next chapter up shortly

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Chapter 3

My daughter, Ebony was a sweet girl, she was peculiar in her ways, but her manners were perfect, she was a kind, sweet generous person, I loved her.

You may be asking how she died?

Ebony died of cancer at the early age of 4. She was my little girl, it broke my heart to see her like that, it was as almost as if she had never been there. I had hold of her hand in the hospital where she gently fell asleep, the machine bleeped and it was all over. Her life had finished when it barely just begun. I wanted to bring her back, I didn’t want to move on so I invented a ‘cure’ that would turn everyone into phantoms and wake the dead on this earth.

I sat back down and picked up the local newspaper from the rack and noticed a headline. “INSPIRING INVENTORS COME ALONG YOU MIGHT JUST BECOME A REAL INVENTOR”. Wow I thought, wouldn’t that be great, I could announce the cure then, the press will be there. Everyone who means someone will be there. Drew Ebony- The Great All Time Geneticist or what about Dr Ebony- The curer of Cancer. Great thoughts, I wanted it to happen, I wanted to claim revenge on the person who let my daughter die, I wanted vengeance. I cut the article out and stuck it to my fridge with a large magnet, with a picture of my lovely little girl on it. “ I will help you my sweet girl, just wait, it is coming and its coming fast”

I opened the fridge and dug out a tin of tuna mayonnaise and a large tub of butter. I pulled the lid from the bread bucket and started to make a sandwich. I felt the bread go moist when I ripped into it. I picked up the knife I used to cut the bread. I threw it across the room, it stabbed into the photo of an unknown man on the wall, the man I was waiting for.

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so what do you all fink??

[LovelyUndeadVam]

OMG. OMG OMG OMG. i want to know what's going to happen! OMG! hurry with the next chapter!!

[Justeazy]

"This procedure naturally causes tour immune system to rise and your body to work naturally"

What is a tour immune system?

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Thanks lovely undead and justeazy the mistake has been changed lol

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HI I WANT TO KNOW THE BEST time to post chapter 4 of the story??????????

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DOES anyone know of anyone else who has read my story so i can add them to my lists of thanks, anything would be helpful... The first story never got through to the young writers award thing. BUT i will never give up lol/....