A new book

[Emo234]

Ok 1 is good,but that's a big task to attempt lol but hold on I go more reviews

2 is really catching.When u read it u then really want to know what is next

3 is really good,nd I get all of it now the first story nd the 2nd lol.This is good real good

[Clank]

AWWWWWWWWWWWWW thanks emo, gud to hear feedback, the next chapter is coming soon, but needs a few alterations first LOL

[Emo234]

Oh ok I think I know what's going to happen,but then again I might not,lol

[Clank]

Yeah, i like the next chapter, definitely the most creative, just needs one alteration

[Emo234]

Hmmmmm well can't wait

[LovelyUndeadVam]

ooooo, OOOOO! i can't wait either! i'm so excited.

[Clank]

AWWWWWWWWW GOOD!!!!!!!! ONE THING I am finding it hard bringing both stories together and i am having trouble but it will be here shortly...

[Clank]

Here we go...........

CHAPTER 4

“Hi I am back, I have rose from the dead, I sleep eternal nights, I rise from the grave when he summons me, then I turn into him, I am dead but I am there, I am not present, I am a phantom”.

“Time will tell before I awake, I will serve my master, I will help him, forever he is mine, I will befriend him into infinite sleep. I will take his blood, and kill him when he falls, for the chosen one will die at the devils door. The mercury blood will be spilt when the merciless spirits pray, because we are one day nearer, I will lead the way”.

“ You will be my servant, my slave at the end of the world, my life will be unspoken at the dawn of the endless world, my life will be taken by my own flesh and blood, I have been suffering and enslaven but now the time has come to reek vengeance over the man who killed me, the man that took my life, the man that destroyed my father and has infinite life. The time has come. Are you Ready? I am!”

“My little girl, Ohhhhhhhh!”.
“Hello father, I speak the truth, I know of the future, you must give your body to me, I know what you are planning, I know of the man that your going to kill”.
“Ebony”.
“Take my hand and give me your soul, I will take you, I will take you, you know”.
“Ebony, avenge yourself, punish him, you have got to.”
“I know what I have to do father, I will be waiting, you will get back your life, you will rule the phantoms, I will make sure of it.”

[LovelyUndeadVam]

kind of hard to follow who is speaking but good other than that.

[Emo234]

I knew it the pic of the man from chapter 3 was the main character in book 1.That makes lots of sense. I will only predict what I think will happen next if u want me to tho . Once again I thought it was great

[Justeazy]

It's pretty good!

I'm confuzed about some things, but I will leave those hopefully to be answered in later chapters...

[Clank]

Please tell me about the things you are confuzzled by because i am as well, and i am trying to write it so everything becomes clear without blabbing on about it. I wanted to say it in a different way LOL

[Clank]

Hi Again here is the fifth chapter of my story, with a HUGE help from LOVELYUNDEADVAM, please give her credit because she has helped me a great deal on this chapter..

CHAPTER 5
Ebony smiled. Her small, white teeth shown in the darkness. Her little grin reminded me somewhat of something evil, but I knew that my little girl couldn't be evil. Ever. She was soft and fragile, like a petal from a flower.
“Father, did you miss me?”
“Yes, my dear, sweet child. I've missed you more than you know.” she grinned.
“Good.” she came near me, and when I held out my arms she went through me. It unsettled me, but I tried my best to ignore it. I felt a piercing chill in my back.
“You have been good to me father, but now it is time, it is time for you to say goodbye, goodbye to the world, goodbye forever, because now, father, I am going to kill you.” she whispered.
“If my time has come, my dear daughter, I will accept it. I am ready, are you?”

She pulled a knife from the drawer, I heard the metal slide over the wheel and the sharp tingle at the tip of the knife. The small footsteps tapped on the lino on the floor.
“I love you, my sweet little girl”, I said, crying.
“I love you too father, I will remember you”.
The knife plunged into my back into my spine and shattered into my heart, the blood ripped out onto my shirt.
“Oh, oh oh oh oh”, I wept.

I fell to the floor crying.
“Ebony, take his life, take his heart and get his blood”.
“Father, I will, bye bye daddy I love you”, Ebony smeered.

She touched his forehead. “Let me control your body, I want you”.

[LovelyUndeadVam]

HA! i can't be given credit for the end!!! that was good.

[Clank]

Thanks but the start is excellent LOL